Tuesday, March 31, 2009

Two Sentence Tuesday

I just finished The Burglar Who Painted Like Mondrian by Lawrence Block. This 1983 story features gentleman burglar, Bernie Rhodenbarr. Two lines:
That charged-up sensation, that fire-in-the-blood, every-cell-alive feeling. I've had it ever since I first broke into a neighbor's house in my early teens, and all the intervening years, all the crimes and all the punishments, have not dulled or dimmed it in the slightest.
From a thief to a murderer. My two come from a short story I've been working on for several months titled "Vengeance on the 18th."
Truman raised the pick and brought it down hard into his friend’s temple. He wrestled the pick out of Jackson’s head and went back to digging with the bloody tool dripping specks of brain.
The ladies at WOM have more Tuesday thrills.

17 comments:

ARCHAVIST said...

A gorey one - can't wait to read the whole thing.

Crystal Phares said...

I love good gore. Two more great lines! Thanks!

Charles Gramlich said...

So when are you going to get to the gore part of your story?

David Cranmer said...

Archavist, I will probably publish it at BTAP once I get it past those finicky Eds.

Crystal, I'm glad you do because it's a bloodbath with lots of sex thrown in for good measure.

Charles, Just trying to live up to the quality of the Razored Zen Halloween featured stories.

Barbara Martin said...

Lois warned me and just as I was taking another bite of my blueberry streusel. Very descriptive, effective writing.

Clare2e said...

Bloodbath with lots of sex? Bring it on, Caligula!

Scott Parker said...

Now, I love the title b/c I immediately think of golf. Hope that was the intention. And, of course, I love the characters names although the image of President Truman driving an ice pick into the head of President Jackson is actually kinda funny. Course, in real like, Jackson would've kicked Truman's ass!

Crystal Phares said...

I can't wait until this is published so I can read the whole thing. Please let me know!

David Cranmer said...

Barbara, This story has gone through many changes but I know I have it now. Maybe July or August it will be published.

Clare, Caligula is a misunderstood love story.

Scott, It is murder on the green and you're right that Jackson would kick Truman's butt.

Crystal, Will do and I'll zip over to your blog a little later today.

Kathleen Ryan said...

David,

Your sentences are intense...keep up the good work. Best wishes as you work on "Vengeance on the 18th." I like the two you chose from Block, too.

I noticed you're watching "The Tudors." I just finished renting the entire first season. I'm going for the second season soon. I was hoping to catch up by the time the new season starts next week. I love anything that Jonathan Rhys Meyers does. I signed up for Showtime when I got into Dexter, which I love, but I had never gotten around to watching The Tudors. I'm into it now!

David Cranmer said...

Kathleen, My wife and I are hooked on THE TUDORS and season two is even better than the first. I was very interested in seeing Thomas Cranmer the Archbishop of Cantebury. Growing up I was told we descended from a brother of Cranmers. Jonathan Rhys Meyers is a wonderfully brooding actor matched perfectly by Natalie Dormer as Anne Boleyn. Enjoy.

Reb said...

Oh those are great lines...just the right amount of gory ;_

David Cranmer said...

Thanks Reb. I'm a-working hard on it.

Linda McLaughlin said...

That's what I call vivid imagery, David. Well done. Don't think I'd want that guy for a friend, though.

David Cranmer said...

Thanks Linda. He's a great guy unless someone sleeps with his wife and that's what happened here.

D.A. Riser said...

Specks of brain. Wow, now that's a visual.

David Cranmer said...

Thanks D.A. I have to give Anonymous-9 the credit for the word specks. It's great to have better writers than myself to bounce ideas off. Sandra S is another big help in my writing.