Tuesday, February 10, 2009

Two Sentence Tuesday

I’m reading Crime & Punishment, a graphic novel based on the Dostoevsky classic. Alain Korkos and David Zane Mairowitz vividly update this psychological thriller to present day Russia. Two lines:
You think I’m depraved. But there’s something eternal in depravity, a fire burning in the blood, which can’t be extinguished.
Straight from a rough draft of mine:
Only seconds before, her face glowed in deep pleasure, and now, it twisted into a grimace of pain as bullets plunged into her back. Ethan quickly cleared his weapon from its holster and pegged Doig in his left shoulder.
There are more 2-4-Tuesday thrills over at WOM.

18 comments:

Georgie B said...

Your snippets from your rough draft always leaves me perpetually intrigued.

Thanks.

Josh said...

dude, you got me man. You had me at "a fire burning in blood."

D.A. Riser said...

I hadn't heard about a C&P graphic novel. I'm new to your blog (so you've probably been doing it), but I like your 2 sentence Tuesday.

Poor Doig ...

David Cranmer said...

Georgie B, Thanks. Now I just need to complete these stories and get them out there.

Josh, All the credit goes to a dude named Fyodor Dostoevsky who was way ahead of his time.

D.A., Gracias. Don't feel sorry for Doig because he may just deserve it. I'm glad you stopped by and I will zip over to your blog later today.

Crystal Phares said...

I'm so glad you put your two lines up today. I feel bad for the woman, pleasure to pain isn't a good thing.

Thanks.

David Cranmer said...

Crystal, She's the catalyst that propels my protagonist along in this story. So pain is bad for her but good for me.

Anonymous said...

I'm not sure I can get into Dostoevsky but I am looking forward to reading the rest of your story. Is it a noir?

-Don Ward

Barrie said...

"fire" in the first 2-liner and "glowed" in yours....very interesting...

Crystal Phares said...

Well, David, as long as the pain is good for you....

Sorry, I couldn't resist! Have a great day!

Crystal Phares said...

BTW, I forgot to say thanks for the name idea... Cole could work.

Clare2e said...

Personally, for laundering reasins alone, I absolutely loathe when the horizontal bop ends in a danse macabre. And yet, I am compelled to know more.

Charles Gramlich said...

I like both examples. I didn't know about the Crime and punishment graphic. Looks worth checking out.

David Cranmer said...

Don, Nope this is the oft mentioned western I'm slugging away at. It does have noirish elements though and I'm glad they are shining through.

Barrie, I'm glad to see I'm keeping up with this Russian hack.

Crystal, Ha! I'm not sure how to respond to that one and maybe I better not... for now :)

Clare, I should have known you would have left the comment that wins the door prize--where do I send it?

Charles, So far, a great read that I picked up at Barnes and Noble. My education of the classics through graphic novels continue.

Barbara Martin said...

Depravity has been known to be carried in genes.

Intriguing two sentences, David. Maybe Ethan goes in for the slow kill, one bullet at a time in sensitive places.

David Cranmer said...

Barbara, Can't do that because Doig is the villain and I need to leave him around to the end. Maybe I can slowly kill him one bullet at a time in the final chapter.

Scott Parker said...

Just found time to scoot over here. Those lines from C&P are so true. And I so love the verb "plunged" when describing a bullet diving into the wetness that is the human body. You know, the more you tease us with twofers here and there, we'll going to rush out and buy your book when it's published. Oh, wait. That's the point, isn't it? ;-)

ARCHAVIST said...

I guessed that was from your western, dude.

David Cranmer said...

Scott, Ha! I'm not sure I have any plan at all. Just trying to contribute to the twofers.

Archavist, Yes it is the western I'm hammering away at. Going good so far.