Tuesday, January 27, 2009

Two Sentence Tuesday

I’ve been reading Robert B novels since 1984’s Valediction. I'm currently enjoying the Bostonian author's 2007 release, High Profile, featuring Paradise police chief, Jesse Stone. These two lines are from the opening chapter:

In the years since he’d come to Paradise he never remembered, from year to year, how pretty spring was in the Northeast. He stood now among the opening flowers and the new leaves, looking at a dead man, hanging by his neck from the limb of a tree in the park, on Indian Hill, overlooking the harbor.
My own two lines come from a short story I’m currently whipping into shape called "Stranglehold":

I had the strange sensation she was cheating on me. It made me wonder who was the bigger fool—her husband for sharing her or me for feeling jealous.
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10 comments:

Scott Parker said...

I vote for 'feeling jealous'. Makes me want to know what he's going to do about it...

ARCHAVIST said...

Both very good openings - both say a lot but leave so much hinted at. Having an affair with another's wife and then feeling jealous of the husband - that's a tricky situation. I was once jealous of a girlfriend's ex boyfriend but that was because he had a better job and a cool car. While, in those days, I still travelled by Shanks Pony.

Crystal Phares said...

You made me sit back for a minute and think... feeling jealous of the husband of the woman he was sleeping with...wow.

I want to know what happens, and I love a book that makes me think, and catches me off guard.

sandra seamans said...

Love your two sentences, David, and with the title, you've got all kinds of visions dacing through my brain. I look forward to reading this one.

David Cranmer said...

Scott, He's in for some serious trouble but I'll leave it at that. The story would work well with OOTG's newest theme.

Archavist, Shank's Pony! I myself had a tiny 1980 Chevrolet Chevette that had a hole ala The Flinstones underneath the accelerator. Needless to say it wasn’t a chick magnet.

Crystal, I'm glad you think it has some merit. Another two weeks or so and I should be done.

Thanks Sandra. Glad it got the imagination going. Hopefully the rest of the story will live up to this snippet.

Barbara Martin said...

Jealousy creates many problems, and I wonder what your character is going to decide to do. I expect I will learn eventually. Great sentences, David.

David Cranmer said...

Thanks Barbara! (It will probably be a few months before it sees the light of day.)

Barrie said...

Oooo.....I love the two lines from your ms!

David Cranmer said...

Barrie, Thanks. And btw my wife is loving I SO DON'T DO MYSTERIES and promises to guest review it on Pulp Writer.

Clare2e said...

I love your teaser sentences, and Parker's have me thinking I ought to throw a noose around the sweet gum in the front lawn, just so I get the full effect in April.