Interesting piece--I enjoyed reading it. The "crimson halo" was a nice description. The ending works nicely and makes me wonder who wanted the "golden god" dead in the first place? A second heir?
Nice piece of writing.Brief, brutal and to the point.
Very descriptive, I saw the blood splattering the blonde.Don
Good writing that kept my interest, and the ending provided an answer to who ordered the kill. Perfect.
Thanks everyone...Chris, I'm glad you liked the description. (You may enjoy reading it again, the answer's at the end.)Georgie B, I've ordered an autographed copy of your book. I'm looking forward to reading it.Don, Gracias.Barbara, it was a quick flash that had been hanging around that I needed to get out there.
Love the story! Great twist. :)
Short and wicked and served with a clever twist. Splendid.
Charles and Lana, Thanks a ton for reading my story!RReynolds, Gracias, amigo.
I also shivered at the "crimson halo." Really evocative. Loved the twist at the end--ah, brotherly love. Powerful piece, David!
I've never been able to produce a flash story - can't get things together in the length so I know how hard these things can be. Well done.
Sarah, Thanks. I'm just fortunate the "crimson halo" popped into my noggin'.Archavist, My average short story word count is around 1500 words. These two to three hundred flashes are far harder but very rewarding when they work.
Great job, David.You gave us a lot of story in a very few words. Terrie
Thanks Terrie. Eastern Standard Crime just gave me a very nice review with similar thoughts. I'm glad to know pithy is in. :)
I agree with the crowd. Tiny and watertight. I liked!
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